http://flames-n-knives.com/knives/other-education/writing-a-long-story-please-read-and-give-feedback-will-take-a-while-to-read-but-would-be-very-gratefull_321.htm Latest consumer news Sat, 22 May 2010 03:03:08 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 http://flames-n-knives.com/knives/other-education/writing-a-long-story-please-read-and-give-feedback-will-take-a-while-to-read-but-would-be-very-gratefull_321.htm/comment-page-1#comment-359 MATHCOUNTS_awesome Sat, 19 Sep 2009 21:30:45 +0000 http://flames-n-knives.com/knives/other-education/writing-a-long-story-please-read-and-give-feedback-will-take-a-while-to-read-but-would-be-very-gratefull_321.htm#comment-359 The story is very well-written. THere are a few spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes, but I love the story. Nice job! The story is very well-written. THere are a few spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes, but I love the story. Nice job!

]]> http://flames-n-knives.com/knives/other-education/writing-a-long-story-please-read-and-give-feedback-will-take-a-while-to-read-but-would-be-very-gratefull_321.htm/comment-page-1#comment-358 Wizard Thu, 17 Sep 2009 12:17:10 +0000 http://flames-n-knives.com/knives/other-education/writing-a-long-story-please-read-and-give-feedback-will-take-a-while-to-read-but-would-be-very-gratefull_321.htm#comment-358 Whilst your imagination is good, your story is made longer and more boring,by your lack of understanding of Grammar.You have too many little words, ie. the, and so etc.I will give you an example- He'd hit the big wolf ,killing it.Other members of the pack skulked outside, baying angrily.Jag not wanting to be noticed by them,quietly closed the door, jamming logs against it for safety .To be a successful writer, you need less not more.Hope you will take this advice? Whilst your imagination is good, your story is made longer and more boring,by your lack of understanding of Grammar.You have too many little words, ie. the, and so etc.I will give you an example- He’d hit the big wolf ,killing it.Other members of the pack skulked outside, baying angrily.Jag not wanting to be noticed by them,quietly closed the door, jamming logs against it for safety .To be a successful writer, you need less not more.Hope you will take this advice?

]]>